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    dots Submission Name: Beguileddots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Befooled voodoo stained glass sainted stories
    Embodied golden alter lies worshiped
    Wined wafers body sanctified promises
    Bloody nails thorn wooded idolatrous crosses
    Burnt sacrificial crucifixions sinful feared
    Used repented

    Pompous ignorant banners flying clandestine
    Stolen heavens dangled carrot
    Eternal peace

    Caesar’s dead laurels destined Roman spear

    Rich laws indoctrinated poor uneducated
    Continued centuries absurd pretence
    Wealthy fat bloated
    Beggars spirituality
    Destroying sanities stolen festivities

    Temples agog
    Stone cathedral mosque prays churches
    Grand established faith
    Besotted light innocent
    Ignorant backbones


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