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    dots Submission Name: She Dancesdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dots She Dancesdots

    On a ship
    into the sea
    waves topped with ultramarine

    On deck with a small band playing into the night
    a soft, timeless melody
    tunes and tales of still peaceful synchronicity

    That the air has seeped into the skin
    like sweet oil on the skin of a dandelion lover

    Submitted on 2009-02-25 03:50:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      short sweet and to the point.. beautifully done cause i suck at that kind of description
    | Posted on 2009-04-09 00:00:00 | by oneinchman | [ Reply to This ]
      Sailing is fun.
    | Posted on 2009-03-29 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]

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