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    dots Submission Name: Tales On A Clotheslinedots

    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 904/475/311
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsTales On A Clotheslinedots

    Beige,or sandstone tinted
    or faint wine stained, the clothes
    on clothesline hurriedly strung,
    made sharp contrast to moss stained deck behind

    by which visitors could walk around
    into uncut grass, chigger laden,
    swaying their blades as minature swords
    braving the breeze like a small

    army in camouflaged dress,
    stricking at unseen invisibles ,
    in protect the drying wash
    flaying at whispers of breeze

    like billowed non-descript flags
    in which spirits played in the folds
    on teeter boards
    undulating up and down

    as if scraping stains from cloth
    the breeze was feinging to hide
    which bleech in non-accomplishment
    shamed the washer's drudgery

    in tryst to remove the beige's bleed
    which age had dirtied purity
    now in habitual stain confessing
    that worn out threads can not obtain

    mercy's sort after absolution,
    yet in some uknown foreign hanker
    eyes must blind themselves to stains'
    unrelenting parasitism

    for the body to relish smell of
    fresh washed sheets and linens
    thankful the washer had done its best
    choosing between beige and white with its eyes closed.

    Submitted on 2009-02-25 04:50:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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