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    dots Submission Name: The Capture Withindots

    Author: realpoet
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    dotsThe Capture Withindots

    When years go by there's seen a distant sun
    ne'er spread with butter as in olden days
    whose page now yellowed as a toasted bun
    in acceptace of time's own lays and sways.

    Then in the night in its awed foolish dreams
    the mind in its flicker across the years
    has a chasm of mystery ,it seems,
    drunk on the wines mellowed by tears.

    Perhaps it's forage in meadows of green
    brighten somewhat the presages of time
    as effervescent as the moments seen,
    yet now whose inaugurations lack their clime
    to this aging body now extending
    Its thoughts to other shore less avenging.

    Submitted on 2009-02-25 05:12:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ya know man, this feels like exactly where i'm at. i think it gave me that little hope i needed. not to say this was for me, but that these words served positive influence and i thank you for them.
    | Posted on 2009-02-25 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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