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    dots Submission Name: Another time another placedots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAnother time another placedots
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    I was slipping through the night
    When a dolly right out of the forties
    Stepped into my dream
    She wearing four-inch -heels
    On her just so-long-legs

    She smiled invitingly to me
    Under her banged long red hair
    With high ruby powdered cheeks
    Sure, I'd like to dance with her
    So I paid my dime for the time

    And as we slow-danced to the
    Music's soft swaying lilt we
    Drifted away in a perfumed
    Padded cloud of desire for
    Another time another place





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      very detailed , imaginary , coordinated , keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2009-03-28 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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