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    dots Submission Name: If I Had Youdots
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    Author: longwinterdays
    ASL Info:    21/F/WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 204/190/64
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wish I could tell you that I do care about you.
    But I have realized that I can survive without you too


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    dotsIf I Had Youdots
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    I wish I could explain how much I care about you...

    How I love you like the smell of pavement after the rain,
    How I miss you like the sky misses the stars on a cloudy night,
    How I need you like my lungs need fresh air

    But if I had you,
    I'd never need the smell of the rain
    Never need to wish on another shooting star
    And I would never need that air again...
    ...except to breathe you in

    If I had you
    My world would be aligned again,
    The storms would dissipate,
    And my fears would be calmed

    But I realize you are only a figment of my imagination...
    ...Or maybe, just a realization that I can find this in myself





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      you are deeply in love with someone very close, you willl weather the storm in any season, you want to parallel both worlds with unity , never give up on goals nor dreams , nice poem , well written, checkout my poetry
    | Posted on 2009-03-29 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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