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    dots Submission Name: I Need A Man...dots
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    Author: Jelly
    Elite Ratio:    2.28 - 16/14/10
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsI Need A Man...dots
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    Like I need another hole in the head

    finding contentment in the single life
    wondering why I feared it before
    making impromptu decisions
    not really caring about the outcome

    "as long as I'm not alone"
    that was my mantra
    cheating myself and my significant other
    of a truly fulfilling relationship

    it never meant much
    once the honeymoon stage dwindled
    all that was left was guilt
    I didn't mean to hurt them

    staying with them unwillingly
    they seemed so happy with the facade
    though deep down I'm sure they knew
    they saw it for what it was

    I can't blame them for trying
    but my heart wasn't there
    the unfairness of the situation
    ultimately persuaded me to take my leave

    I don't need a man
    so please stop asking why I'm single
    I want my space
    some time to figure myself out

    I suppose there's a possiblity
    that I just might choose someday soon
    to once again share my world
    when? you never know...






    Submitted on 2009-02-26 10:50:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hahah. Wonderful picture choice! So cute! :) It made me smile. Big. But, I'm in school, so now my teacher is looking at me funny.


    The first line reminds me of the song 'Hole in My Head' -Dixie chicks. :) Which is a good song. And, also makes me smile. I was a little worried when I read the title, 'I need a man..' and the opening line swept away my misinterpretations. Good for you. Nobody NEEDS a man. Or maybe they do..but I doubt it. Highly. xD


    I would have liked to see some more rhyme; it lacks a little something. However, I like the message, and the poem is pretty good. Nice write. :)
    | Posted on 2009-02-27 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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