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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: Jelly
    Elite Ratio:    2.28 - 16/14/10
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    dotsAlonedots
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    perpetual loneliness
    days fade into nights
    moments become memories
    and the whole cycle repeats

    can it be possible
    for a soul to be un-paired
    to have no mate to long for
    no true love to share?

    i've been lonesome for so long
    it feels like home
    slowly the walls were built
    the solitude has grown

    none are able to enter
    although many have tried
    my heart is a cold fortress
    locked up from the inside

    too many unfruitful attempts
    have left me pondering
    should I even pretend to hope
    that there might be a happy ending?

    i suppose only time will tell
    if there's someone out there for me
    until then i stand alone
    keeping safe my heart's key






    Submitted on 2009-02-26 11:08:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You expressed your emotions very well in this piece, I can definitely relate to it in my own life experience.
    | Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all wow, really creative writting here such depth to it, you really thought about how you felt and captured it not all can do such work, so congrats on this write and keep up the good writes, ty
    | Posted on 2009-02-27 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]


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