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    dots Submission Name: sun kisseddots

    Author: Cherub Winter
    ASL Info:    21/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 17/20/11
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       maybe it means nothing, I never know because what i write comes from skewed versions of my daily reality. My love affair with something so animate, yet so lifeless. It kills me, but i welcome it. self sabotage???

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    dotssun kisseddots

    When the sun kissed the earth
    It burned all to whom he gave birth
    With listless rhetoric, and self indulgence
    He smite the wind with restless insurgence
    Quickly, the graves were swept away
    Leaving their keeper speechless, with nothing to say.
    The bodies were turned, and souls had float about,
    He destroyed them all just wanting a way out
    Call him mindless, call him selfish, but he forever your keeper,
    Put blood upon sweat, took skin from his bones, just so you could dig a little deeper
    Get off your plank fucker, your soapbox is cracked
    You matter none to him anymore, you're withered and cacked
    Go back to your grave, just dont take me there
    I'm not coming this time, I will die in prayer
    Sticks and stones, needles and drones
    Make you ugly in your prime
    "Nay" say I, I will not partake in your sad and sorry endtime.
    With this in mind, I can take it off the headstone
    Remember again I am just blood, flesh and bone.
    I was never forever like we were never together
    although we are lovers on another plane.

    Submitted on 2009-02-26 16:38:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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