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    dots Submission Name: The Last Sacrificedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsThe Last Sacrificedots

    The Last Sacrifice

    It plays a piano Grande
    Tones twist soft twistings relentless
    Chimes fluent rolling scarlet scales
    Tinkling sacred chorales
    From cherubim fingers
    Plucked petaled folden harps

    Of the ballerina swans mute vocals
    I know to her return
    I succumb
    To the ever endless, endless rest
    Tenured finally in her sacrifice
    How the blood rips its way
    To the last

    Torn open at the seams
    Behind the clenching of my fist
    Raging at myself
    As I fall faltering in her tears
    The damned and hated hours
    Every ounce of me canít resist

    While beyond
    Teasing digits pluck the melody
    Pull the essence from her music
    Reverberates to me
    I am the caged animal
    Inside her symphony
    Bound to my own tether
    Of what will be
    Will be

    Trace this line upon my heart
    Trace this line upon her lips
    Drag this shackle to the lightless dungeon
    Where words become the bars of iron
    Written on the paper walls of my prison
    Her face my only window
    And her love
    The only Nocturne
    Plays the tune spiralling from above
    In the rhythms of my blood

    Closed the rivet in the door
    I chose my sentence long ago
    Feed me on empty life
    Tossed upon her naked floor
    And leave me to rejoice
    In the trackless chasms of my soul
    Her face
    My only window
    This love
    My only light
    Plays upon a grand piano
    The sheet music of my life

    There within and endless vision
    Beneath a golden tree
    I succumb to endless rest
    Finally understanding this sacrifice
    And how this blood
    Flows its own way to the last

    Submitted on 2009-02-26 18:43:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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