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    dots Submission Name: "The Game We Play"dots
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    Author: Drifting Star
    ASL Info:    19/F/Somewhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 22/101/73
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 572
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 760



    Description:
       Written on a inspiration, from my big brother. *grin*

    -Sennie.


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    dots"The Game We Play"dots
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    Blood to blood, tongue to tongue;
    we started this game much too young.
    Give it some time--some space to grow,
    There's so many things we shouldn't know.

    The only touch you can give me is cold,
    the edge of your knife against my breast;
    you've never wanted to tell the truth, aniki;
    let's just stop pretending.

    Like butterflies, we fly aimlessly;
    without purpose, pretty things we are.
    I've give up on trying to keep my wings
    closed against the your constant assault.

    I'll tell you what--let's play a game;
    you tell me you love me and I'll...

    ...Ssh, we don't have to tell anyone.




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