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    dots Submission Name: From Afardots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsFrom Afardots
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    The days seem more dull now
    And the nights feel much the same
    I doubt I can feel some how
    All I'm becoming is a name

    And you didn't have to go, you chose to
    You could still come back at any time
    After all we have both had to go through
    You've always been the one on my mind

    And it makes me a little sick
    Though I'm glad that your happy
    It just sets off a small tick
    I just need to hear you love me

    But I'm not asking for you to tell me
    Wouldn't put your smile in jeopardy
    If he completes you so
    I know I should let go

    I remember how things went so fast
    How we went from friends to lovers
    But I'm not living in the past
    I just still want you in my future

    And I'm not angry
    I try not to be
    Sometimes jealousy
    Can overcome me

    And I know that one day I will call
    And other times indeed
    I'll invite you to come and leave it all
    To start over with me

    But not any time soon
    And so all of my days will grow cold
    And my world is of ruin
    At least memories of you don't grow old
    But it won't be over soon




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