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    dots Submission Name: she whispereddots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/257
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 106
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    She's so scared to do anything more then cry
    afraid he's going to leave her
    when now is the time she needs him most.
    The news crushed her, tore her in two
    she acted like it was ok
    but only a few knew
    that inside she just died
    and nothing would ever be alright.
    She asked him if he would love her forever
    he smiled and said yes
    even if I can't give you children, she whispered?
    She was almost to scared to hear the answer
    afraid her worst nightmare had come true
    he said, why would I ever leave you?
    She sighed not to sure if she should cry or smile
    but the tears they come anyways
    and she's alone so its not ok
    he's a million miles away
    just like he aways is.
    God damn the war
    but god, please could you save me?




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