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    dots Submission Name: Kyle dots
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    Author: sweet_rayne
    ASL Info:    25/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 493/464/111
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       this i wrote for my little brother that died three years ago this april. R.I.P little brother


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    dotsKyle dots
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    I miss you
    My brother who
    Is gone from sight
    Never again will
    I see your smil
    Or the cheeky look
    Upon your face
    I miss you

    I miss the talks
    We shared
    And the secrets
    That remain ours
    Never again will I hear
    Your voice as you’ve gone
    Away forever from a sister that loved you
    I miss you

    I miss the sound
    Of your laughter at
    The jokes we shared
    And the false security
    That you would never leave
    I would give anything to hear it again
    I miss you

    I miss you brother
    And your gone from sight
    I wish you didn’t leave me
    That dark night
    That you’d be here and
    I could hold on tight
    But brother you’ve gone away
    And I ca never have you back
    I love you little brother
    And I still miss you




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      Very sad. But well written. Your expression is straight from the heart......always the source of the best poetry.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2010-05-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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