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    dots Submission Name: If You Knewdots
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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38/30/42
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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    Description:
       would you?


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    dotsIf You Knewdots
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    if you knew what i knew
    you would lie to yourself too
    saying it's gonna be okay
    to get you through another day
    truth is
    it doesn't work that way

    if you knew what i knew
    you would lie to yourself too
    putting on a show
    cause life moves far from slow
    truth is
    at times i don't wanna go

    if you knew what i knew
    you would hate yourself too




    Submitted on 2009-02-28 04:02:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       steamrollerrrrrr i like this poem. and i like how u start both parts with If you knew wht i knew.

    gud job cuzz


    peace
    Grim




    | Posted on 2009-03-01 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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