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If You Knew


Author: SilentDreams42
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Words: 74
Class/Type: Poetry /Me
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would you?


If You Knew



if you knew what i knew
you would lie to yourself too
saying it's gonna be okay
to get you through another day
truth is
it doesn't work that way

if you knew what i knew
you would lie to yourself too
putting on a show
cause life moves far from slow
truth is
at times i don't wanna go

if you knew what i knew
you would hate yourself too




Submitted on 2009-02-28 04:02:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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   steamrollerrrrrr i like this poem. and i like how u start both parts with If you knew wht i knew.

gud job cuzz


peace
Grim




| Posted on 2009-03-01 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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