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    dots Submission Name: Power Beamsdots

    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 904/475/311
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Raphael, Raphael, Angel walking
    through the wood at night
    with your wand of hope burning bright.
    What chance have you of chasing fright
    from the deer afraid in the forest of life ?

    Wonder, wonder how the stars of night
    Placed themselves apart, just so right ?
    Raphael, Raphael, can you shed some light
    why the stars awink their tales at night ?
    May, perhaps, they wish to chase the fright
    from the deer afraid in the wood at night ?
    Who says, "Angels don't speak loudly?"

    Perchance there be a mightier power
    placing stars high above Earth's tower
    for the eye to be dependent on
    what the soul has told the mind of eye ?

    Raphael, Raphael, Angel of God's own heal
    attentive to His subjects feel,
    come with your wand and chase the night
    from us dear in the woods of night.

    Submitted on 2009-02-28 04:46:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Perchance there be a mightier power
    placing stars high above Earth's tower".

    This to me makes the whole poem complete.

    You have done well here I dare to say.

    "The Noose" is still at rant but this I understand.
    Well done! Blessed Be! jm.
    | Posted on 2009-02-28 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]

    I just read about a "Singularity" which I compared to a star romance thing and then mentioned to "Searching" about the beauty of a deer in the woods likened as fleeting for any absolute truth found.

    "awink their tales at night"
    Who says angels don't sing loudly?
    | Posted on 2009-02-28 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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