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    dots Submission Name: Birth.dots
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    Author: jamar2
    ASL Info:    52/male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 53/46/75
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 711
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 330



    Description:
       The idea here is to write a poem 2 verses, three words per- line, and there MUST be at least four O's on each line. Any subject.


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    dotsBirth.dots
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    Born too soon,

    Loose your cord.

    Oozing nostrils opened,

    Onerous eyes oppose.


    Ventilator of omnipotence,

    Worried Mother obsequious.

    Consultant from ophthalmology,

    Organized operation overnight.






    Submitted on 2009-03-01 22:00:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's good,but I'm not sure how or why. It's one of thoes thing's that are what they are for no reason. It's truely sad, but maybe after it all there was a happy ending?
    | Posted on 2009-03-03 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm sorry about your family member itsouds bad is there anything i could do to help you?
    | Posted on 2009-03-01 00:00:00 | by blackdemigod13 | [ Reply to This ]


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