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    dots Submission Name: April or May?dots
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    Author: lovedeathsdeath
    ASL Info:    20/M/NCUSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 39/43/33
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 79
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is rather experimental for me. Meaning is found in more words than what are read...


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    dotsApril or May?dots
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    so long?

    the seams.

    bitter
    frustration
    cannot
    be
    myself
    when

    when I

    know

    know this
    has to
    be something
    or
    or
    the way

    sleepless.
    sinking,
    aching?
    no need?
    confusion
    confession
    which?

    forget.

    lightless pictures
    so bright,
    so blind
    Where?

    writhing
    weary
    beaten
    gnashing

    Is this real?




    Submitted on 2009-03-02 07:42:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes. I love. <3
    So deep, yet so few words.
    You know this is my lovely favorite of yours.
    ^-^
    You wrote perfically what you were trying to get others to see.
    (oops, bad spelling)
    Amazing job.
    I think your getting closer.
    | Posted on 2009-03-11 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that was either really deep or just plain words. i think it was the former. i like how you said that there meaning is found more in words than in what is read. that was great. if i read it slowly and with passion, i can feel something. somthing like pain, loss, uselessness. i feel like i'm a wanderer, someone that noone wants. fantastic. absolutely fantastic.
    | Posted on 2009-03-03 00:00:00 | by tricklingrain | [ Reply to This ]
      There isn't alot of detail in what caused all that emotion up there. This poem is dealing strictly with the internal battle caused by something we don't know. It is somewhat fuzy because of this, but maybe thats what you were going for, ambiguity. Your description leads be to belive there is more to this poem then what we are given, this true? I really like the short, one word lines, it gived the poem a sense of urgency and panic; it makes me feel and see the author twisting and reeling in chaos and that was just great.
    | Posted on 2009-03-02 00:00:00 | by Silenced Hope | [ Reply to This ]



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