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    dots Submission Name: a husband finally letting godots

    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 120/198/62
    Words: 369
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsa husband finally letting godots

    I still remember the conversation
    I still feel the tears.
    recalling all the memories
    that caused in me such fear.

    I still feel the breaking
    that your hands inflicted.
    I remember falling down
    praying that the pain be lifted.

    I remember lashing out
    running, changing, all inside.
    and the days that I have searched
    for a place that I could hide.

    I remember birthdays
    cry through our old songs.
    wandering over in my head
    what I did so wrong.

    What did I forget in you
    which sign could I have missed?
    what did I do so wrong
    that I should have to live through this.

    I built my life around a love
    a love that I had built for three.
    I held that love for all of you
    and kept none back in store for me.

    you took the children and the house
    broke me down, and left me there.
    took from me the trust I gave you
    and left me but the clothes I wear.

    I gave you every part of me
    and thats exacty what I lost.
    Its you who made all the mistakes
    Its me who has to pay the cost.

    you shook apart all I have built
    broke it down in just one day.
    thats all it took a moments time
    for you to steel my life away.

    I wish the best for you and yours
    I pray that you sleep well at night.
    as for me I'm far too tired
    for me to finish out this fight.

    you'll never fully understand
    the reoccuring dreams at night.
    nor why after all these years
    that I can't shake the erge to fight.

    I'm sorry that it took this long
    that I could never give to you.
    things that you have found in life
    and all the things the others do.

    just know that I will not be friends
    you are asking far too much.
    there are things I cant accept
    Ideas that I will never clutch.

    all my efforts now in vain
    forgiveness is now so far away.
    thus the reason for me calling
    I have wiped my hands today.

    Submitted on 2009-03-02 13:34:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When someone you've built something comes and tears it down the feeling is miserable. I can relate to how you feel though I'm not married being in a relationship for a few years She walked out of my life with some vengenace that she that she had with me and wouldn't even explain why.....Your child/children should still be apart of your life and it seems as though she took those rights frum you...You have to fight for them...nothing is more precious in this life than our children they are the future we hold so dear.

    This piece showed a lot of emotion and heartache I enjooyed reading this

    J. Brooks
    | Posted on 2009-03-09 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Im going thorugh the same thing. I noticed that at the beginning your verses were stronger than during the end however my favourite line is this

    just know that I will not be friends
    you are asking far too much.
    there are things I cant accept
    Ideas that I will never clutch.
    | Posted on 2009-03-03 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]

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