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    dots Submission Name: Runningdots
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    Author: all2rest
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 30/40/34
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Misc/Religious
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       I trust in you


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    dotsRunningdots
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    I'm running on empty, I need more of you
    it's getting harder to smile past all we're going through

    But I'll keep it going, I've got to let it ride.
    I know you're pushing forward and that you're by my side.

    A feeling's just a feeling, your truth is all that matters. Your love will carry me even when life seems to be so scattered.

    I'm not trying to complain I just have to let it out. I'm growing tired in my heart
    I really need you now.

    I'm running on empty
    and in it for the long haul

    I trust you more than anything
    you're my everything, my all.

    I'm running past the circumstances
    past the failures and the falls

    I running to your arms again
    I know you answer when I call.




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      I love this, and I think I kind of know what you mean. When you're in a relationship there are times when you feel like your partner is being indifferent, despite all the love you've given. But it's just a phase, in the end you realise they've given you more than you could possibly imagine.

    I think the last few stanzas are beautiful, especially these two:

    "I trust you more than anything
    you're my everything, my all."

    "I running to your arms again
    I know you answer when I call."

    Your partner is lucky to have you.

    Keep writing, your words astound me.

    Yours, Iffy
    | Posted on 2009-03-05 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]


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