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Comfort and Embrace.

Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
ASL Info:    22/f/PA
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Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Comfort and Embrace.

Off into the distance,
One can only see—
There are two paths that one can roam
To eternity.

To the left is defeat,
To the right is hope.
But I,
I stand atop a cliff overlooking these paths,
Wondering which one to choose;
Is this love divorced from this world forever?
Or has experience made it stronger?

Weary and broken,
Hazel eyes glisten in the sunlight—
Gazing below the cliff of apathy;
The waters shimmer and stare back,
Awaiting for the decision to be made.

The sorrowful maiden inside leaps out
And dives over the cliff;
Her body is united with the love of ocean’s mind—
Becoming as cold as ice
But her hope is still alive.

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