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    dots Submission Name: Comfort and Embrace.dots
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    Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
    ASL Info:    22/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46/119/104
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsComfort and Embrace.dots
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    Off into the distance,
    One can only see—
    There are two paths that one can roam
    To eternity.

    To the left is defeat,
    To the right is hope.
    But I,
    I stand atop a cliff overlooking these paths,
    Wondering which one to choose;
    Is this love divorced from this world forever?
    Or has experience made it stronger?

    Weary and broken,
    Hazel eyes glisten in the sunlight—
    Gazing below the cliff of apathy;
    The waters shimmer and stare back,
    Awaiting for the decision to be made.

    The sorrowful maiden inside leaps out
    And dives over the cliff;
    Her body is united with the love of ocean’s mind—
    Becoming as cold as ice
    But her hope is still alive.




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