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    dots Submission Name: Eldoradodots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I give to you my hard candy.
    Your hair shuffles across your face dark and sandy.
    The simple crush just at the wrong time.
    I知 afraid to look at you afraid of what I値l find.
    Give me a little time to heal.
    I will again begin to feel.
    I knew it wouldn稚 work you have your college plan.
    And I want to live as a simple man.
    We leave things unspoken.
    Both of us were left broken.
    I知 scared of the unknown.
    Things inside me chiseled from stone.
    I知 tired of living in the loveless shadow.
    I致e thought of you and me on the path to Eldorado.
    If we take a chance I値l have to take it slow.
    And you値l need to handle my highs and lows.
    I知 scared and alone this is why I write.
    Something frightening, terrifying and lovely is in sight.
    Will you pull me out of my self-pity?
    I think deep down in your eyes hides the golden city.

    Submitted on 2004-02-09 22:51:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I second ghost's emotion. I was to leavce for Las Vegas before I started dating my wife. The idea of having us move far away from our current life still lingers...

    Good stuff though I also again agree that any smoothing of rhthym will make this even stronger
    | Posted on 2004-02-10 00:00:00 | by mightylt | [ Reply to This ]

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