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    dots Submission Name: Tend to the Cutsdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Learah liked the glass hat in Like I'm Six. She asked me to use it somewhere else, so here it is.


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    dotsTend to the Cutsdots
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    It's like tap dancing in glass shoes
    and a glass hat
    in a low-beamed room
    with a concrete floor.
    No matter how careful,
    how mindful of the peril.
    You eventually surrender,
    for the audience enjoys the danger,
    so you just let go,
    and tend to the cuts later.




    Submitted on 2004-07-13 14:14:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Those first four lines act as compressors act as stacatto oppressors bangbangbangbang
    I wonder who the audience is: you (I am a camera) or them...
    Barely suppressed anarchy barely disguised need to be considered the odd one out
    so you just let go/
    how easy is that?
    glass hat.
    my favourite.
    K

    oh.
    I hope you are enjoying your latest stay on this sceptered isle...
    it looks as though you are
    | Posted on 2004-07-17 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      With your work it's always about the ideas, the writing is usually flawless. So I hope you are at that place in your life where you can forget about being careful and worry about fixing the broken things later, as long as it's not only the audience that is enjoying this dance. Cheers!
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      ^.^ ooooh I like this... and I get it ^.^ yay! (sometimes I read things that I don't fully understand but for once... I do). Its always much more fun to forget about being careful and to do what you can to make yourself and your audience happy ^.^.
    Much love
    -Alli
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
      brilliant! yeah! life is like this a lot, ain't it? just let it go, go for it, and tend to the cuts and bruises later. i like it, i like it! dance on, lady!
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      another great poem that seems so simple and straightforward on the surface but which could have so many different meanings to it..
    the image of the glass hat is great ... i'm not surprised someone else asked you to use it again. (i guess cause of the tap dancing and the low ceiling i pictured it as a top hat.. nice image)
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      An observation: You often say "for such and sucha reason" in the last sentence of your poems.

    It kinda freaks me out, for I know not why you do it.

    I like a lot of the things done here, mainly the faustian entertainer thing. Glass is cool, therefore, so is this poem.
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      i lkie it what i what i get from it is the life of any artist to put self out there like dancing with glass shoes,, i like that line the most by the way
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by slickone113 | [ Reply to This ]
      well, I can't say anything else than the others. this is a great piece and so true. very well written. I just wanted you to know that I liked it very much, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the abandonment in this. This is another one of those minimalist masterpieces that I keep returning for. Well done and a favourite.
    | Posted on 2004-07-14 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this a lot. It was well written and I absolutely loved the glass shoes and hat incorporated into this piece. It really shows the potential dangers of the world when the possibility lies of being smashed on a concrete floor. Brilliant!
    | Posted on 2004-07-14 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this. Just go for it and worry about the cuts later. Live in the moment. Put your cares aside and take risks for the pure joy of dancing in glass slippers and a glass hat. This is a cool piece. I enjoyed it a lot. Thanks out to Learah for the suggestion!
    | Posted on 2004-07-15 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]


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