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    Author: col13x
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    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Clipper Ships



    My mother; she wasn’t there any more
    Burned away in chemo radiology
    Therapy for the incurable
    As she lingered for a year
    Lobotomised by cancer

    But in her dreams I believe she sailed her clipper ships
    Sailed away on the mighty Cutty Sark
    Indomitable spirit she was
    Swayed by the poetry of canvas sails
    Sea gull riding to the rigging

    Until the coma took her
    And us to a three day hell
    As we patiently watched her
    Slowly inexorably fade away
    Every last breath counted in longer minutes

    But she stood bare foot on the deck
    The salt washed planking oak wind swept
    Beneath the great white wings blown the prow
    Her heart pushed aboard the clipper ship
    She sailed the proud sea the pride of her fleet

    And every last breath in longer and longer minutes
    She reached at last the very last
    No goodbye, no farewell, just a soft emptying sigh
    As at last; she escaped
    Leaving us alone in the deathly silent room
    Gone

    Aye my lads ! She’s a fine grand ship
    My mother said
    My brothers and I stood gawping on the dock

    The finest clipper of the fleet the mighty Cutty Sark
    The great masts from which to hang your dreams
    And ride the plumes of briny waves
    She’s a thousand books of sailor’s tales
    With rigging made from Neptune’s harp strings
    She can sail from one edge of eternity to the next

    In crematorium puffs of smoke
    And now just ash
    White wing gull she rides the slipstream still
    Still; she sails her clipper ships









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