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    dots Submission Name: battledots
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    Author: xieno
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 7/16/24
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 444
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       Wow, I actually wrote something decent for the first time in a long time. ^-^

    I'm just sick of being lied to.


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    dotsbattledots
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    Trust is a crisp value
    Once it crumbles
    So do you
    And the tangled mess of deceit you've wound
    What you've casted your whole life around
    Your pedestal has fallen
    Now you're just like us, reposed on the ground

    I don't know what your obligation is
    Safe to say our future is dim
    "So far, so good" is what you thought
    "Just wait til my claw of deception is too deep in the heart"
    What you didn't know is that I knew all along
    You look like a newborn baby bird when you try to act strong

    Like stuffing a suitcase
    You codifed my emotions neatly
    One by one
    And took me to an unrealistic city
    Dropped me off and said your goodbyes
    But I found my way back this time
    I won't let you be what I become

    This time is different, though
    I know what you are
    And I know how your kind works
    Aiming straight for the heart
    I won't let me lose me again
    You've never been a friend
    Well get ready for the battle of lies
    I'll get ready to win




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      hmm...vivid imagery, nice word play. The structure seemed a bit off...but that does not really take away from the emotions. I once...had a friend like this. Up until the last few lines...it kind of felt...like the way I feel now...currently in my life...It is not a good thing to lose oneself...I swore I would never change myself for anyone. They could either take me as I was or walk away. Strange thing is...love changes that. Makes you WANT to change...to be better viewed in the eyes of the one you seek to capture...But...my facade word faded...dropped like a clouded veil and Im married...to one I think I should be scared of? So confused...and Ive lost myself with no hope now of retaining who I once was. Its a sad realization...and Im sorry for boring you with my rant...but your work brought it from me. Really, nicely done.

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    | Posted on 2009-03-07 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]


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