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    dots Submission Name: 2dots
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    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 629
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    I said "I'm the only one locked in this cell".
    It'd been better if I'd've said, "You should rot in hell."
    'Cause the metaphor was lost on you
    Nevermore ends every thought of you
    When I first caught this flu
    I bought into and sought after you
    Too many good things for me end in assault it's true
    But, I can't give up, if it's what you thought I'd do
    I ain't mixin' nothin up, if this is what you want then Just Do
    Like Nike. I might be a bit hyphy, but to fight me, the choice comes from you.
    I don't know what you want me to undo
    There's no help coming from you
    All I want is to talk, to talk to you
    But, you're still so reluctant to
    Sometimes, I wish you were locked in here too




    Submitted on 2009-03-04 06:42:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aaaaaaa..... a little confusing at first but after reading again i kinda get it.... iat first I this was about your grand ma....
    | Posted on 2009-03-04 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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