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"The Magic Shoemaker"

Author: Ron Cole
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This is a repost. It was originaly posted shortly after I began posting at Elite, and thus is old. I thought some of my more recent readers might enjoy it, and perhaps some of my regular readers might even enjoy reading it a second time. It is one of my favorites.

"The Magic Shoemaker"

His smiling face was known to all,
he whistled while he worked;
his humble shop was cramped and small,
and everywhere there lurked

a pair of shoes, a bag, or tack,
all waiting for repair.
His craft was good, his talent great
his fees were always fair.

But his shoes were magic it was said,
and in addition to perfect style,
his shoes caused wearers spirits to soar,
and on every face,

Ron Cole
September 2002

Submitted on 2009-03-05 18:28:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Happy feet means NO corns, or rough and scratchy heels.
I need a pair of MAGIC SHOES,
then I'll have happy feet.

I enjoyed the Movie HAPPY FEET, there was a good theme there. and boy could that lil: penguin dance !!

seee--- not all kids are little, some of us are old men. LOL
| Posted on 2011-04-28 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm glad you reposted this ^-^ It's a great lil piece - and brings back memories for me of a song I can't quite remember (useful arn't I hehe). Thanks for the memories :)

| Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice work. I like how your lines rhyme and sound natural too.
I love the the last stanza, but "his shoes caused wearers spirits to soar" sounds a little strange...maybe "they caused their wearers' spirits to soar" would be better? Nevertheless, good stuff.
I like this old man in the poem : )

colored stone
| Posted on 2009-05-01 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]

always room for the folksy and the homespun and a good story told well.

this fits the bill for the main part but the rhyming scheme is clunky most certainly in the last bit.

you can say the same thing; maintain the sentiment and underpin rhyming and scanning integrity by:

his shoes were magic it was said
and on top of perfect style
they made the wearers' spirits soar.
and on every face,
a smile...

take it easy ron,

| Posted on 2009-04-15 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
  I would like to walk a mile in this guy's shoes, can you get them on Ebay??
| Posted on 2009-03-18 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice and soft Ron. Very good rhyme and the subject matter is calming and quite superb.

| Posted on 2009-03-08 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Thank you for reposting for the newbies. I enjoyed this piece. It reminded me of a barber shop that I passed every day when walking to elementary school. People would just gather in the shop to visit with the owner. All seemed happy inside. When I began high school he was no longer on my route but I went out of my way just to say hello daily.

This also reminded me of the part in Hans Christian Anderson when he made the balerina her shoes. I think she stated it made her feel like she could soar also.

People and their gifts always brings a smile. Thank you for sharing yours. :)
| Posted on 2009-03-08 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]
  I think I'll place my order pronto! Happy feet are a wonderful thing to have. :-) Sharon
| Posted on 2009-03-07 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  if it fits wear it. poe
| Posted on 2009-03-05 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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