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    dots Submission Name: absencedots
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    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 120/198/62
    Words: 367
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I wish to let you know some things
    and wish that you could understand
    how hard it is to share your feelings
    when you're a soldier and a man

    I've lived each day and drew my breath
    struggled on with pain unyielding.
    broke through barriers let my guard down
    but never could I show my feelings.

    I know that you're too young to read this
    but its you who drove me to success.
    I've no regretts for what I've done
    I merely did what I thought best.

    I've missed you both since I've been gone
    my tears say all that I can not
    The years that I was kept away
    though I dont show it, hurt a lot.

    I was trying with such passion
    to give you all I never had.
    a goal that I would soon accomplish
    but I'm sure you'd rather have your dad.

    I never meant to be away
    but now that I am coming home.
    I can be a better father
    never more leave you alone.

    I'm sorry that I cannot speak these
    some confessions dont come easy.
    I just pray that you remember
    I hope you both remember me.

    It has been two long years now
    since I left to join the war.
    leaving in the rear two children
    something i can do no more.

    I'll never leave your side again
    I wont be your source of tears.
    I promise on the life I'm living
    that I will make up these lost years.

    Daddy's little baby girl
    and my son I was so wrong
    I hate myself for causing pain
    to you cause I was gone so long.

    I am coming home real soon
    my mission finished in success.
    I've given to you now a future
    but I fear lost your respect.

    I hope that you can soon forgive me
    for my intentions all were good.
    but over these past two years
    I couldnt be there like I should.

    Daddy loves you, please stay strong.
    I am coming home to you.
    this month my children I now promise
    I'll make up for what I've put you through





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       This feels like a heartfelt letter to one you care about. There is alot one misses when in the service so I can relate to this because I am a service man's wife.
    I think as a poem, the rythem is off a little, but the message is clear. Thank you for sharing your thoughts so openly.
    | Posted on 2009-03-09 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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