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    dots Submission Name: Money Treedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1045
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    Description:
       I know 2 lines don't go with scheme but just hang in with me i had a message to get across


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    dotsMoney Treedots
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    To most money is everything to others itís only the seed,
    Planted and grows into greed.
    To some it grows from trees,
    As others strive to feed.
    To some itís only a weed,
    Useless
    To success.
    But what do I know, itís only what I see.
    Someday maybe we will all be Freed.




    Submitted on 2004-02-09 22:53:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Actually, I think the two lines help by giving a breather from the rhyme scheme. Especially since the words all rhyme with the same sound.
    | Posted on 2004-02-10 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]


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