Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Bellsdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Plegias
    ASL Info:    17/ male/ my house
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 37/23/40
    Words: 462
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 509
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2653



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsBellsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I hear and heed the bells' sound, they call to me and I hear their voice. They are familiar to me, the sounding of the bells, ten bells I'll never forget.
    One
    A golden sounding bell of deep but lovely sound. For God and his neverending love. Even with the fear of his almighty being, I love him back. He gave me this life and I will continue to live it even in blackest day.
    Two
    A beautiful gold-brass bell of fantastic sound. For my parents who have always loved and cared, and I will continue to do so to them. I'll never forget them since they're here with me now.
    Three
    A silver bell of light, clean sound. For the friends I trust and will never forget. The ones always beside me to bitter end.
    Four
    A brass bell of knowledge and age. For the mentors I've had the blessing of being with. The years I've spent with them and the kindness they've shown to me.
    Five
    A many-metaled bell but with a single sound. For the world which has allowed me to live in it. I appreciate it's kindness even in its struggles.
    Six
    A huge bell of brass and copper with a nagging sound. For the dissapointment long forgotten. I still remember it as you would a dull pain from a minor wound of long-ago.
    Seven
    An iron bell of sad and unfortunate sound. For the sorrow I try to hide. I still have have problems and I know it still but I won't ruins others with them.
    Eight
    A bell of unknown origin and sound. For the uncertainty that we all have. I know not what will be or what will come but I pray it will be for the best of all.
    Nine
    A bell of nothingness and non-existance but still cries with harsh sound. For the darkness which still grabs my back. It tries to pull me in but I will not let it.
    Ten...
    This is the multi-bell the one of many sounds,
    And each one has been in a way bound.
    For the ones who make the day a day,
    And will always be no matter what's in their way.
    For the ones who've loved and lost,
    You still live today even through your holocaust.
    For the ones who help others,
    Including those who help, though many don't like, non-religious brothers.
    For the ones who give their lives to teach,
    Even when they feel like it's pointless to preach.
    This bell of kindness is a lyrical one,
    With many close rhymes, that weighs up to a ton.

    Now find your own for these bells are mine,
    Apreciate each and what they give, however many you find.




    Submitted on 2009-03-06 18:33:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      i absolutely loved this poem. i wasn't completely sold on the it first but i bye the end i bought it and had it gift wrapped.

    now i loved it, thought it was great, but great can always be better.

    other than it's "disappointment" not dissapointment .


    my first one was bell one where it's described as 'gold-like' why not just go all the way and make it gold?

    BELL 2 gold-brass
    I see how your mixing god and knowledge with this one but I really think there are enough metals for each bell to be unique and special, what about copper? Strong, durable, changeable, bright, shiny

    BELL Five many-metaled bell
    What about Pewter for this one, it’s a composite metal made of tin, lead, antimony, and copper. Or you make it out of crystal and then it becomes many faceted unless you’re going for a patchwork bell

    BELL Six brass and copper
    Again I see the connection between knowledge and the parents but like I also said I think we can find a special something for the disappointment bell. Have we considered lead? Poisonous, associated with death in several forms, can eat away at you, they put it in paint to cover things up, it’s a soft metal that one can easily change the shape of?

    BEll Eight unknown origin and sound
    The silent bell…. The bell of adamantium? indestructible and seen only in comic books no one has ever made it into a bell and wouldn’t know what it sounded like, and was made by accident and no one knows its origin for certain
    -i was fishing on this one a bit...

    now there are just suggestions, mind i like the poem just the way it is my only thought was if there was a direct and concise material for each bell that it might give them more weight. a little more punch.




    | Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    171806

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    This written by Chelebel
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Push written by JanePlane
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Giving written by jjd
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Wavelength written by saartha
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry