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    dots Submission Name: In Owe of Thanksdots
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    Author: realpoet
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    Words: 255
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    dotsIn Owe of Thanksdots
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    She was chosen as a special vessel
    in a garden of rankly growing weeds
    no one cared to tend for its special needs

    Until was born a second Eve,full of grace,
    as special priviledge amongst her race
    to foster again what was in begin ,
    to whom the opponent didn't enter in.

    Oh, special rose of an errant people,
    who tended well the garden of soul,
    joying in her place as a partaker
    in the garden of an herbal essence
    spicing with relish a meal she prepared

    as the angel in a visitation
    came to sup with her innocence
    asking her to bloom again
    The Garden of Eden as in begin.

    to joy in sit beside
    The Tree of Life in midst of the garden .
    The message spoken was loud and clear.
    In an assenting joyful reply,
    "I will gladly partake in such event
    to see all peoples to walk once again
    in the garden prepared for every soul
    by my son who will open garden gate
    to everyone who would enter in."

    Oh, Mother of Our God, do pray for us
    who would pick the flowers of God, your son.





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    ||| Comments |||
      Very classy.
    | Posted on 2009-03-09 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice - my only comments would be on using the word "born" twice in one line and starting so many lines with "she". This is a little stumble point for me.
    | Posted on 2009-03-09 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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