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    dots Submission Name: ambitiondots
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    Author: nansofast
    Elite Ratio:    5.7 - 2351/2103/268
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       my life is sweet


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    dotsambitiondots
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    to simply outlive the competition
    store winter in quilts of under achievement
    not to care what my ego thinks
    his ego thinks
    to fathom being as
    all of it
    and sing thoughts
    that make the room grow brighter
    to love everyone in the world
    at once,
    words and meaning
    traveling
    in foreign souls




    Submitted on 2009-03-07 20:08:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i've read your work before.. last year maybe? anyway, your writing is beautiful. i like this piece a lot. thank you for sharing,

    merlo
    | Posted on 2009-06-02 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
      to be an achiever and yet not to be attached to what we achieve is also good. Ambition me thinks can be steered into affecting the world for the better too. thought provoking piece for me this morning Nan of the beautifuls.

    Kate
    xxx
    | Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a great deal. It has an edge of William Carlos Williams and the heart of Rumi. I like the open-ended feeling of love for love alone. It can reach a tad into the realm of Hallmark cards, but you keep it just out of that circle.

    I always appreciate the innocence you convey. It's never too heavy. It is never a burden to enjoy your work.

    A song as always, Nan.
    | Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by Hollander | [ Reply to This ]
      your simple kindnesses to others on this site, that need a good dollop of friendship from time to time. and your very generous, constructive comments, leave me in no doubt that you are a national treasure.

    i visit your poems whenever i need to see the world in a better light. it is as if you have left a candle of hope for us all. thank you.

    it isn't just that you radiate warmth from your pages, its that you are also able to express your feelings in such perfectly constructed phrases with the best chosen words. never cloying, never patronising or judgemental. my bet is that even the cynics are seduced by your wordpower and innate rhythm. .... well, you got me!







    | Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      ian dury (rip) told us that reasons to be cheerful are three...

    i see that there may be more and it seems that you do too.

    i like a list; i have time for lists most especially when they are tuneful and thought through.

    i see this poem as a list both as a chronicle of ambitions and of reasons to be cheerful.

    always six degrees of syncopation.

    hope you're well doll,

    k
    | Posted on 2009-03-27 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this a lot. It's similar to a journal entry I just posted. Missing the simple life...almost like a child. I really like this because of how simple and understandable it makes life feel. Thats the way things should be unlike this hectic crap we have to deal with.
    Good short exert.
    | Posted on 2009-03-12 00:00:00 | by Strator | [ Reply to This ]
      I am too braindead to comment on this meaningfully, but it echoes a theme I have been struggling with, and I really appreciate the poem's clarity and beauty.

    How are you, by the way? It has been awhile....
    | Posted on 2009-03-08 00:00:00 | by screams | [ Reply to This ]
      She seems to breed doves
    at her discretion
    and follows the olive
    vine's twisted will
    past a mere pathogen's
    double helix
    out toward the core
    where the air is still


    Sorry, Miss Nan See, that's all this tired brain is capable of sharing today.
    | Posted on 2009-03-07 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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