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    dots Submission Name: The Wakingdots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angst
    Total Views: 618
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    dotsThe Wakingdots
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    This is...
    the calling of
    the Wretched
    This is...
    the waking of
    the Damned
    like to thank
    you all
    4 making me
    who I am
    if not 4
    your ignorance
    and your
    Apathy
    I might've been
    been somebody!?!

    SCREAM!
    if it makes you feel good
    SCREAM
    cause you can't cry!
    SCREAM!
    if you lost your words
    SCREAM
    and be heard in time!

    lying in a shallow grave
    reaching for a soul
    tormented, can't be saved
    it feels so cold
    blind to the stars
    falling from the sky
    born-to-live
    live-to-die?!?

    SCREAM!
    if it makes you feel good
    SCREAM
    cause you can't cry!
    SCREAM!
    if you lost your words
    SCREAM
    and be heard in time!

    A dream is a wish
    your heart makes
    unless...
    that heart is mine
    Praying to
    an absent god
    in a Hell
    so utterly Divine

    SCREAM!
    if it makes you feel good
    SCREAM
    cause you can't cry!
    SCREAM!
    if you lost your words
    SCREAM
    and be heard in time!

    Not everyone knows
    what its like
    to feel numb
    a meaning in
    another
    vacant conundrum

    now take a breath
    and forget you care
    follow my lead
    as I drug you here!

    SCREAM!
    if it makes you feel good
    SCREAM
    cause you can't cry!
    SCREAM!
    if you lost your words
    SCREAM
    and be heard in time!
    .....
    now die?!?




    Submitted on 2009-03-07 20:55:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      didn't know you posted this here already, you already know I f*cking love this one<3 tons :) it sounds really natural too, I could see it being sung....or screamed =]
    I actually have nothing to criticize or say you could've done better on with this one, one of my faves of yours

    I love you<3
    | Posted on 2009-03-10 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      wicked lyrics. I really like the SCREAM! parts. It wakes me up like your title and I wanna do some screaming too.



    | Posted on 2009-03-10 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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