Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: The Wakingdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angst
    Total Views: 566
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1748



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Wakingdots
    -------------------------------------------


    This is...
    the calling of
    the Wretched
    This is...
    the waking of
    the Damned
    like to thank
    you all
    4 making me
    who I am
    if not 4
    your ignorance
    and your
    Apathy
    I might've been
    been somebody!?!

    SCREAM!
    if it makes you feel good
    SCREAM
    cause you can't cry!
    SCREAM!
    if you lost your words
    SCREAM
    and be heard in time!

    lying in a shallow grave
    reaching for a soul
    tormented, can't be saved
    it feels so cold
    blind to the stars
    falling from the sky
    born-to-live
    live-to-die?!?

    SCREAM!
    if it makes you feel good
    SCREAM
    cause you can't cry!
    SCREAM!
    if you lost your words
    SCREAM
    and be heard in time!

    A dream is a wish
    your heart makes
    unless...
    that heart is mine
    Praying to
    an absent god
    in a Hell
    so utterly Divine

    SCREAM!
    if it makes you feel good
    SCREAM
    cause you can't cry!
    SCREAM!
    if you lost your words
    SCREAM
    and be heard in time!

    Not everyone knows
    what its like
    to feel numb
    a meaning in
    another
    vacant conundrum

    now take a breath
    and forget you care
    follow my lead
    as I drug you here!

    SCREAM!
    if it makes you feel good
    SCREAM
    cause you can't cry!
    SCREAM!
    if you lost your words
    SCREAM
    and be heard in time!
    .....
    now die?!?




    Submitted on 2009-03-07 20:55:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      didn't know you posted this here already, you already know I f*cking love this one<3 tons :) it sounds really natural too, I could see it being sung....or screamed =]
    I actually have nothing to criticize or say you could've done better on with this one, one of my faves of yours

    I love you<3
    | Posted on 2009-03-10 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      wicked lyrics. I really like the SCREAM! parts. It wakes me up like your title and I wanna do some screaming too.



    | Posted on 2009-03-10 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    171843

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    Rooted in Nature written by Chelebel
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Whispered written by endlessgame23
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Dream written by closetpoet
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry