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    dots Submission Name: perfect bliss if only for a seconddots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsperfect bliss if only for a seconddots
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    Long ago I gave up hoping for what I wanted.
    Knew I would never get my dream.
    But one day I did, you said you wanted to be mine.
    Life stopped in that instant, I was so overjoyed.
    Never did I know this happiness.

    It seemed like all was good, nothing could get in the way,
    Until your roommate came and told me what he thought.
    Said I wasnít good enough for you, told me to leave you alone.
    He went as far as blocking me from you.

    I told you this and you went to him but he denied it,
    So now youíre confused about this whole thing.
    You say you donít know what to do anymore.
    But what about me, what do you think this is doing to me?

    I got everything I dreamed of, thought this was it,
    Finally life would turn around but it slipped through my fingers,
    Faster than I could grab on, and now Iím fighting
    To get back that perfect bliss I had if only for a second.




    Submitted on 2009-03-07 21:19:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! How appropriate a piece! This describes most of my days with my lover.... Confused by lies and rumors that get in the way! Is it bad that we fight and fight and fight but its mended by that silly I love you line? I hope your head has cleared up and things are like that moment again... I miss those times. I miss that constant happy that perpetual smile. But somewhere in the tears and hurt I forgot what a smile was, how to laugh like I meant it... kiss like I wanted to be kissed... love like I should.... This poem was extravagant as its a universal feeling
    | Posted on 2009-03-23 00:00:00 | by jasonsanctuary | [ Reply to This ]
      AWE! This was a really pretty but sad poem!
    I have been in that spot before!
    Good Write!
    | Posted on 2009-03-09 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
      Losing something special is always very hard to bear. Losing love is almost impossible to get over. When the love is deep and true, the hurting, wanting, and longing will always remain.

    You expressed this very well indeed.


    Frank.
    | Posted on 2009-03-08 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      seems like u had something special then lost it, i would fight kill for something i strongly feel about, thats just me, keep up your hopes and dont think about it to much, ty
    | Posted on 2009-03-08 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      hurt, huh?
    | Posted on 2009-03-08 00:00:00 | by aeijae | [ Reply to This ]


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