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    dots Submission Name: slant, near, rhymedots
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    Author: Plegias
    ASL Info:    17/ male/ my house
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 37/23/40
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I am particularly proud of this poem...Okay, not really. It's just different from my others because it not only has rhyme but... wait for it... STRUCTURE!!! The poem is meant to be in iambic octameter, though some lines don't sound that way. Also, the poem's not supposed to be like this but it ended up this way: A, B, C, D, C, C. (no the last four weren't supposed to be that closely related, but watcha gonna do? haha) You may rate this how you like.


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    dotsslant, near, rhymedots
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    Amaster of rhyme, I'm not, see?
    A pupil, yes, if you will please.
    I find a word most like to rhyme,
    And see what will make the poem bind.
    If I can't find a word in time,
    Then I just use the old slant rhyme.




    Submitted on 2009-03-08 15:18:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this leaves me pretty confused, it's short. but for one thing i was confused about the exact flo.... c you rhyme in between on get work this really nice energy going on then drop it all in the middle and end. sry dude that's what i got....







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    | Posted on 2009-03-10 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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