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    dots Submission Name: Not Unlike My Thoughts As A Childdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsNot Unlike My Thoughts As A Childdots

    Fish with alluminumn scales swish their tales in
    An aquarium filled with blue ink
    and light catching diamonds

    Outside the glass a reflection of an oval white owl face smiled and poured out his heart with a David Bowie song

    his oval lungs and oval concentric voice bounced out of an oval cavity.
    The air from inside him was scented with resin coated opal emerald dust.

    a yellow bus was taken to the schools
    a lot of children jumped out and asked them silly questions

    It took a lot of abstract answers collectively delivered by word of mouth.

    Down the line and disapearing across the horizon lived a sillouette of lovers touching lips in the shape of a giant heart

    Submitted on 2009-03-09 01:42:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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