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    dots Submission Name: Try to Feel Heavendots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTry to Feel Heavendots
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    Stitch my eyes and place me in heaven
    Let me stay but not realize peace
    Then bound me away and let them open
    So I can see but not have, to know tease

    I'd gladly scratch out my own eyes
    To be back there again
    I know they couldn't all be lies
    The things you told me then

    And now my heart beckons you
    I've tried I can't keep it quiet
    You've got half of it too
    I'm sure you can hear it's cries

    See, I still dream of you
    Even when I don't want to
    But at least from time to time
    I still get to see you
    I doubt you see me too




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