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    dots Submission Name: Thoughts IIdots
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    Author: Gmann2
    ASL Info:    20/m/wa
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 5/3/55
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
    Total Views: 68
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    Bytes: 1872



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    dotsThoughts IIdots
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    An Angel
    Here's the tale
    Hidden deep
    The box is nailed

    Bright and glorious
    Was his youth
    But soon it shattered
    Finding Truth

    Ignorance and innocence
    All go up in flames
    Arguments and bruises
    No more laughter breaks a day

    A foster home with demons there
    A year alone in pain
    When returned it didn't stop
    So goes on the play

    Dads secrets
    Broken through
    For his love
    What he would do

    Abusive friends
    So they drink
    Does he hate me
    So the her thinks

    Broken bones
    Unconsiousness
    All of drunken rage
    Forgetting

    Smile and hide the story
    Everything is fine
    Say a single word
    And there he draws the line
    Moved again to a small town

    Sweet, a clean was said
    But what he didn't know
    More pain and drinking ahead
    Again the drinking
    Worse this time

    Because in love hes happy
    But to dad it's not fine
    Misery for misery
    Mistake for mistake
    Everything he holds close
    Away father takes

    Mother far away
    Oblivious, can't help
    And even if it was so
    Can she stop this hell

    No she can't, no one can
    Even when he is sober
    All he wanted was
    Someone to love him

    Alcohol has a voice
    "Failure!!" it screams
    "You'll go nowhere"
    What happend to dreams

    Dads smile exists now
    As a mask to public
    He angers result
    Wear cover up

    Read a script
    To CPS
    Everyones knowing
    It's a load of BS.




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