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    Author: Gmann2
    ASL Info:    20/m/wa
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 5/3/55
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Longing
    Total Views: 62
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    You'll be gone again
    Today, you left your note
    Like you always do
    And I'll say "How thoughtful,"
    While I'd love to scream at you

    Because I go empty inside,
    Everyday, I put on the face
    Oh, we're just friends, remember?
    A feeling we're fooling ourselves to erase

    And when the conversation burns,
    For hours, down to a dead cold sweat
    You set me straight, and I folded
    Forgetting your impact, your worth
    With another broken response yet

    The laughter from you,
    That could make me cry
    To remember I held that ability inside
    A happiness so clear, I thought I would die
    Right then, when you told me
    When you refused to lie

    And when the world crashed down,
    Just then, I went a little breathless
    Every day, putting up that brave wall to hide
    Taking these pills again, in vain

    As if you would ever crawl inside




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