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    dots Submission Name: Those Flashing Lightsdots
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    Author: Darkest Flaw
    ASL Info:    21/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 206/284/104
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 66
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    Bytes: 591



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       don't know what to say about this, the beauty of fighting off death does weird things.


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    dotsThose Flashing Lightsdots
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    I watched the sunrise once,
    with the aura of a dream,
    while poison paints the metaphor,
    of the suns radiant beams,
    where nature is the master,
    the mother of all time,
    creator of the love we share,
    and the thought behind the mind.
    The truth is hidden in the stars,
    with a story of whats to come,
    12 signs of the great Year,
    that undo all thats been done,
    in the midst of an auburn twilight,
    the blue moon starts to fade,
    consuming the glory of the night
    to break for the ever rising day.




    Submitted on 2009-03-09 23:46:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lovely, quite lovely in fact. even though i am not at all a fan of rhyming poetry, i was able to get past that and appreciate well crafted lines
    | Posted on 2009-03-10 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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