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    dots Submission Name: Wizarddots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWizarddots
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    There is a wizard here
    in this kitchen
    darting
    side to side
    against a hot silver grill

    He's throwing water on the heat and steam
    moistening his chin
    and grizzly beard

    This wizard wears an apron
    Has long skinny legs with white whispey curling hair growing out from underneath his denim jeans

    He has bear feet, skating across the kitchen grease, growling and reaching out for salmon

    Grilled
    Teriyaki
    Lighlty dusted with toasted pepper
    pineapple sliced
    melted across the top

    He does not believe in magic.






    Submitted on 2009-03-10 02:34:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hehe, awesome. I don't think I've ever read a description that describes the process of a cook cooking in such an imaginative way. It's perfect.
    | Posted on 2009-03-29 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it's awesome. Paints quite a vivid picture in my head of this mad genius in the kitchen. Almost like something out of a crazy movie I saw when I was younger.

    | Posted on 2009-03-10 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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