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    dots Submission Name: Around The Benddots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 432
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 506
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsAround The Benddots
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    You sit alone, all by yourself
    Looking at pictures up on the shelf
    The pictures are from days gone by
    Gazing at them, you start to cry

    They are the pictures of you and her
    Deep dark feelings they do stir
    You used to be so happy with each other
    Now you don't even talk to one another

    Those were the days when life was good
    You would go back if ever you could
    And fix the things that went so wrong
    To put things back where they belong

    But you can't ever change the past
    Who knew that day would be the last
    That you two would together spend
    You thought it would never end

    But it did and she walked out
    Leaving you with lots of doubt
    Did she ever love you? Was it true?
    Or was she just playing games with you?

    You may never know what is right
    Alot of things were said during the fight
    Things you never meant to say
    But sometimes things happen that way

    You both head off your separate ways
    With feelings of longing for older days
    When you could speak and not say a word
    Unspoken things didn't need to be heard

    You each knew what the other one thought
    Things like that you can never be taught
    It's like you had a total connection
    At that time we achieved total perfection

    Neither one of us ever thought it would end
    We didn't know what lay around the bend
    Around the bend we ran into some trouble
    When it happened it burst our bubble

    We started to fight most every day
    Until you decided you couldn't stay
    So you went off with another man
    And sabotaged my life's plan

    The plan was together until we died
    All I can say is I really tried
    to make it work right till the end
    After all you were my best friend

    But you said you didn't love me any more
    Then you turned and walked out the door
    I was stunned I couldn't say a word
    My crying and sobbing were the last things you heard

    I'm trying my best to get on with life
    It feels like you cut out my heart with a knife
    I suppose someday it will be healed
    When everything is finally revealed

    So I bid adieu to my one true love
    She was sent from heaven above
    To be my wife right till the end
    If only we had never gone around that bend…………..




    Submitted on 2009-03-10 14:04:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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