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    dots Submission Name: Not The Life I Wanteddots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 313
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsNot The Life I Wanteddots
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    This life is very different, than that one I wanted
    All of my dreams and memories are haunted
    By all the way things that should have been
    It was never if it happened, it was always when

    Now all those dreams are gone up in smoke
    And all the memories to you they are a joke
    I only wanted our life together to be great
    And I thought that was to be our fate

    But I guess you had other plans for life
    That didn’t include staying my wife
    I tried everything the best I could
    But in the end you said I was no good

    I’m sorry things didn’t turn out right
    We always ended up in a fight
    Over nothing all that big or bad
    I don’t know why you got so mad

    We used to be the best of friends
    I wish that was where the story ends
    We decided we would be wed
    We were forever so you said

    I guess forever isn’t as long as I thought
    Because In a bunch of lies you were caught
    You were keeping secrets from me
    You still deny it was deliberately

    Not telling me is the same as a lie
    You wouldn’t look me straight in the eye
    I should have known right from the start
    Never again give a woman my heart

    You can bet it won’t happen again
    Because in the end I just can’t win
    They rip my heart right out of my chest
    Then they say “This is for the best”

    I never want to love a woman again
    Down that road I’ve already been
    It ends in a lot of misery and pain
    On my memories is a big black stain

    So that is how the story ends
    After all these years…………. we’re no longer friends




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      whell this is great poetry but i would like to set a few things straight one not all wemen are untrustworthy two men arnt no better and three "Never again give a woman my heart
    " i sincerly hope for all that its worth that you arnt serrios in this line you are a wonderfull poet and if your poetry reflects you in any way at all a decent person so just hang in there and hell hit me up if you want to talke about lying ex's or if you just wanna chat that works too in the mean time keep writing your good but practis makes perfect
    | Posted on 2009-03-12 00:00:00 | by cha | [ Reply to This ]
      sorry to hear you heart ache, yeah i guess relationships are hard [censored] iam only 21 and been threw it, just gotta pick your self up and move on in life that the only thing you can do trust me, ive sat time before and learned the hard way i was holding on to something that was never there she moved on in life, and to think that, that whole time i believed, so my friend take it easy and time will heal if you let it, hope my words could be of some help to you i read your write and understood it, ty
    | Posted on 2009-03-10 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]


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