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    dots Submission Name: Cancerdots

    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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       I am re-submitting this. I deleted the old post re-named it and edited it very little. Before I wrote this with a significantly differant intent and meaning, now after my father's diagnosis I re-read it and was amazed how my faith speaks to me in this poem. I hope you can see it too.

    your friend in Christ

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    Pity you - The terminal diagnosis
    Methodical ammunition, a gathering of swords
    To strike with patient certainty
    Reveals the camoflaged enemy

    A chrysalis in slumber absorbs abuse
    Portraying compliance, a dramatic pause
    The timing is critical, the plan is pure
    A genetic desire to consume

    Clarity of ambition, the cobra's stealth
    Avenges it's pain and loose coiled wrath
    The strike is true, the flank is breached
    No more the jester, A general's reign begins

    A capitalists battlefield raped by arrogance
    Parched desire, an antidote for bloom
    Scattered seeds fertilized by faith
    A confluence of trust, relief of fear

    Growth of purpose, A new era emerges
    The victor revealed, The savior heals

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