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    dots Submission Name: Steal Me Baby,Steal Medots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 904/475/311
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSteal Me Baby,Steal Medots
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    Get you in the bleachers
    and stqnd by your man,
    He's not a guy walking in the sand;
    He's got it, baby, He's got it, your man.

    There's something about his common man talk .
    Something about him. Something, yeah, yeah, yeah!
    That makes you want to get up
    and beside him take a walk.

    He plays at his sport
    like he's got something to court
    and drinks his beer from a cold cold can.
    Baby, I tell you, you'd better hold onto your man !

    He tackles the ball like he's full of hate.
    He tears at the leather as if to see inside.
    Baby I'd like to date him and seal my fate.
    Baby, baby,baby you'd better hold onto your man.

    You'd better stay in the bleachers
    and shout for your man.
    He's the guy I'd like to walk with in the sand.
    He's got it, Baby He's got it, your man !

    Yeah! Yeah! Yeah! Yeah,Yeah,yeah,
    Baby, You'd better hold onto your man.




    Submitted on 2009-03-11 03:50:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Have to do some soul searching here - pass the ball around a bit. Will come back for a try! jm.
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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