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    dots Submission Name: A Trace of the Prophetdots
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    Author: BusterLILblock
    ASL Info:    21/F
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 452/270/50
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 798
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 533



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       This is about the Last Prophet (may peace be upon him). The greatest role model for mankind.


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    dotsA Trace of the Prophetdots
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    His blessed erudition
    Quenched the thirst of the ardent
    Amid the drought of ignorance

    His every utterance
    Enticed the wandering
    Amid the desperate plight

    His slightest gesture
    Conveyed a lane for the abashed
    Amid the turmoil

    That which was saved
    Is for those who crave

    Greatness and Prosperity
    Refinement and Grace

    Trace the profile of his dispatch
    As it is vital to the ultimate triumph




    Submitted on 2009-03-11 19:52:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Apt and strong words for a powerful subject; this is a very successful poem for me.

    I don't have any criticism. The grace with which you use words and make phrases, is so unusual and and I see nothing wrong with the text or the verseform.

    | Posted on 2009-05-22 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome...The first three lines were a bit stumbly because there were a lot of words with a and d in them and they were rather hard to understand. But other than that it's awesome; it actually radiates some of the awe that you are trying to capture. May Allah bless our beloved Prophet and make us strong enough to do as he told us.
    I love it ( :
    | Posted on 2009-03-28 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel a lot of emoition in here, which is good.
    however, i felt myself stumbling a bit reading, as if it was hard to follow.
    some of the statements dont really make sense.

    however, it is clear that you love your religion and are so proud and reverant of our prophet.
    This type of poetry for you is obviously from the soul and powerful, i hope you make more =]

    | Posted on 2009-03-12 00:00:00 | by silverstars12 | [ Reply to This ]
      me likes the last lines they are just so awesome. I like what you tell.



    mag gud job buddy

    | Posted on 2009-03-12 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      I am sorry but it made since but not much. Now I understand the poem but it didn't flow, it's ike you tried to make it flow but it didn't work out. I would like to see more of a rhyme scheme or better free verse my friend. Also your words are great but try to use to many big ones because you should appeal to a wide audience.
    | Posted on 2009-03-12 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel like im being disrespectful, if i dont give it a positive comment, since u wrote about the Prophet (may peace be upon him)
    it basically sums how we need to live,just like what we learned in tafseer today.

    Can we ever show true gratitude?
    Wallahu alam
    biswaab.
    | Posted on 2009-03-11 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
      ooo, very nice, the words speak to me. I can't see anything wrong with it as of right now. Keep writing, I'll be stalking you o.O hehs!
    | Posted on 2009-03-11 00:00:00 | by April1Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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