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Author: GoKart Mozart
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just a rant,, no need to comment


How can I look you in the eye
When each time
I die a little more inside.

How can you say you'd do anything for me
when you can't even do that?

I've lost my sunshine.

I've got nothing,

You made me happier
than even I realized,,

and i KNEW you made me happy.

I know what it feels like now.



The broken heart.

Every thought of you

every picture

every memory

each time someone mentions your name

I can't take it.

I don't know what to do.

I've never felt this way.

What do you do when you give your all

your everything, to someone who IS your everything

when you truly would do anything for someone

when you've completely given yourself to them

and they just "can't handle it"?


Submitted on 2009-03-12 04:39:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Why dont you rant in your journal then?

You know this isnt good enough to post,so why bother?

Its stupid telling people not to comment when your secretly hoping people will read your "feelings".

Do it in a poem and make it worth while.

| Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]

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