Description: I know it's not finished, but it's late. There may be some typos that I missed, so if you see them, point them out to me please. my keys on my keyboard are sticking. Anything suggestion that you might think help this out, tell me please.
Dedication: Drew Hunt
Love is So Abrasive -------------------------------------------
As you are sleeping
I'm sitting here thinking
about how my life would be
If you decided to leave me.
And I know I shouldn't
Always be so negative
But history has proved itself
And love is so abrasive.
But how do I keep going strong
If I don't know if this will keep going on.
I never want to say goodbye
But that just makes me more afraid.
I don't want you to leave and
I don't want your love to fade
I never want to say goodbye
But that just makes me more afraid.
I don't want your love to fade
And when you kiss me
I begin to wonder
If this will be the last kiss
Is our love going under.
And I know I shouldn't
Always be so negative
But my history proved itself
And love is so abrasive.
And everyday, it's so hard to hold on.
But it's so much better than you gone.
I never want to say goodbye
But that just makes me more afraid.
I don't want you to leave and
I don't want your love to fade
I never want to say goodbye
But that just makes me more afraid.
I don't want your love to fade
I do see exactly what you are saying in this writing! Good job with writing out what you feel!
But, it doesn't seem to completely flow together which makes the reading this poem, seem emotionless.
What you could possibly do to make it a little better is put something at the end like a question mark, comma, period....
Small example of both:
"As you are sleeping
I'm sitting here.
I'm thinking about how my life would be
If you ever decided to leave me.
I know I shouldn't always be so negative.
But history has proved itself
That love,
Is so abrasive.
How do I continue going strong,
When I don't know if this will keep going on?
I never want to say goodbye,
Which just makes me more afraid.
I don't want you to ever leave and
I don't want your love to ever fade.
I never want to say goodbye,
Which just makes me more afraid.
I don't want your love to ever fade.
When you kiss me,
I always seem to wonder.
If this will be our last kiss,
Is our love going under?
I know I shouldn't always be so negative.
But my history has proved itself,
That love,
Is so abrasive.
Everyday makes it so much harder to hold on.
Although, it's so much better than you being gone.
I never want to say goodbye,
Which just makes me more afraid.
I don't want you to ever leave and
I don't want your love to ever fade.
I never want to say goodbye,
Which just makes me more afraid.
Don’t ever let your love for me fade."
Submission Name: Love is So Abrasive
