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    dots Submission Name: Heartbreakdots

    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 553
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    When I was much younger than I am today
    All of the young ladies just couldnít stay away
    They said they really liked me would I take them out?
    I said of course I would they didnít need to shout

    They said they liked the way I strutted when I walked
    You should hear the other things they said when they talked
    They would tell me that they loved me and I would reply
    And tell them that I loved them too boy could I tell that lie

    Theyíd give me whatever I wanted sometimes easily
    After I had gotten it it was time to set them free
    There really wasnít much challenge to get into their jeans
    I knew the right words to say and I had the means

    But there was this one everyone said was easy
    From the way they talked she must be pretty sleazy
    So I gave her a try she didnít let me get very far
    We were in the back seat of my buddyís car

    I couldnít understand why she wouldnít put out for me
    After all from what I heard she was damn easy
    I thought I had lost my touch and this was the end
    I was really worried; this might be a new trend

    I mean how she could resist when others wouldnít try
    I really wasnít that worried I wasnít gonna cry
    I knew I would get her; I had to be more patient
    And maybe just for her some new moves I would invent

    Russian hands and Roman Fingers an octopus I was called
    When I would get with the girl most never even stalled
    They would get right down to business just like a pro
    When in all reality they really never would know

    That I didnít care for them although some did for me
    And I guess I hurt them some when I set them free
    But we were all much younger then now we are all grown
    We can no longer be like that no seeds to be sown

    Itís time to be a grown up and act like an adult
    To do it any other way would sure be an insult
    To the way our parents raised us from when we were little
    Be careful how you treat a heart they can get real brittle

    When they do get broken a lot of pain is inflicted
    Though itís not a crime youíll never be convicted
    For breaking a heart and the pain that you cause
    That should be reason enough to make you want to pause

    You canít take back the hurt no matter what you do
    So before you do it you better think it through
    The pain can destroy some is that what you want?
    If you do then forever your memories they will haunt

    It is not a good thing to be cold hearted and mean
    If you want to break it off you should do it clean
    Then when you take a look in the mirror every day
    When it all was said and done no one had to pay

    Thatís the way it should be now and forever more
    Nobody should be hurt by someone walking out the door

    Submitted on 2009-03-13 08:15:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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