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    dots Submission Name: Where did the love go?dots

    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhere did the love go?dots

    Where did the love go when you said goodbye?
    Did it really leave or did it just hide away?
    Did it really go away up into the sky?
    Where did the love go when you said goodbye?
    Was it ever real or was it all a big lie?
    Is it really gone, did it really go astray?
    Where did the love go when you said goodbye?
    Did it really leave or did it just hide away?

    Submitted on 2009-03-13 08:31:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dean, a heartfelt poem of lost love, good rhyming, but a tiny suggestion to smooth it for comfortable reading:-
    Where did love go when you said goodbye?
    Did it really leave, or just hide away?
    Did it really fly away to the sky

    Each line is then 4 ft. If you like the suggestion, you could continue with the rest of the poem.
    I did enjoy it, so thanks for oosting it.
    | Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      It was very nice.It made me feel your emotions and it gave me a better inside on how you felt.It could be longer just like your other poem but , all in all I liked it :D
    | Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]

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